We'd like to see a few revisions to the application before we can accept it - primarily, the first person sample doesn't give a good sense of Tharja's voice as it's composed of her giving orders in battle. It's a very specific situation and not prone to telling much about her personality. We'd like to ask for a revised sample that better reflects Tharja's voice. Please be sure that this matches the personality you supplied as well.
Additionally, the application contains multiple spelling errors (class tress), misused words (necessary instead of necessarily), and grammar issues such as run-on sentences. We're not super strict about perfect spelling and such, but we'd like to ask you to clean it up a little bit as it makes the app difficult to follow in some parts.
Revision Request!
We'd like to see a few revisions to the application before we can accept it - primarily, the first person sample doesn't give a good sense of Tharja's voice as it's composed of her giving orders in battle. It's a very specific situation and not prone to telling much about her personality. We'd like to ask for a revised sample that better reflects Tharja's voice. Please be sure that this matches the personality you supplied as well.
Additionally, the application contains multiple spelling errors (class tress), misused words (necessary instead of necessarily), and grammar issues such as run-on sentences. We're not super strict about perfect spelling and such, but we'd like to ask you to clean it up a little bit as it makes the app difficult to follow in some parts.
Thanks very much!